Talk:Super Mario 64 Bloopers: SwagQuest

What to do with the Plot section?
Here's how I've started revising this article's plot section:

== Plot ==

After taking a nice stroll, Luigi decides to drive back to Peach's Castle and see what the others are up to. He doesn't realize that Mario is hosting a rave in the lobby. After arriving at the castle and parking his kart, Luigi hears loud music and shouting from inside the lobby. Lakitu is keeping a vigil on the castle grounds; he tells Mario via walkie-talkie that Luigi is heading for the castle. Mario, revealed to be drunken and naked, begins to panic; he hides all of the guests just before Luigi opens the door.

Luigi has pretty much grasped what was going on, but he interrogates Mario anyway. The latter is busted when Wario and Steve show up late, crashing through the walls and raving about the affair. Luigi then demands to know why his own brother didn't give him an invitation. Mario tells him that the rave was only for people with swag, and that Luigi is anything but cool. Luigi runs away after being told this, while Mario goes inside to revive the party.

Luigi looks to Bowser for help. After being given a Justin Bieber magazine, Bowser begins giving the plumber swag lessons. First, he tells Luigi to stare at a painting all night. The painting in question depicts Bowser lying down coolly and somewhat seductively. While Bowser is sure that this exercise will be beneficial to building Luigi's concept of swag, Luigi is burning the painting by the next morning. Bowser then tries to help Luigi assimilate a better fashion sense. After trying on several awful outfits, Luigi finally throws together an ugly gangster outfit that manages to awe Bowser.

Bowser takes Luigi to Delfino Plaza, claiming that the new garb will earn Luigi affection from the ladies. At that moment, Dr. Kleiner strikes Luigi with a crowbar, knocking the outfit off his face. Bowser is outraged and tells Luigi to fight the old man. …

Stuff like that. The article's still going to need cleanup, especially in the later parts of the plot, but this is all I could muster for now. Is there anything you'd change or make more brief? I was trying to work around the plot points rather than explaining all the gags, shortening the plot section and making it more fluid by only explaining the necessary. If there is anything that can safely be removed, or anything that must definitely be added, please say so.

After I get feedback on this part, I might work on the rest of the plot, then put this into the actual article. And the other bloopers need this kind of work too. Like some sort of zombified Pj:Bloopers, except that we actually do something this time.

Bonus plot summary:

Luigi is sick of being an uncool misfit, and asks Bowser how to have swag. The lessons don't go smoothly, to say the least.

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